Volume 2 Chapter 43 Deserted Dungeon Raid Squad (V)
To make the comedy work better for a US audience, let's tweak the delivery with punchier dialogue, exaggerated reactions, and a stronger contrast between serious moments and absurdity. Here's a revision:
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[Chat Exploding]
: UOOOOOOOH! ANE-GO!!!
: I'LL FOLLOW YOU TO HELL AND BACK!!!
: THAT WAS INSANE!!!
: YURIHIMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!
: YURIHIME-SAMAAAAA!!!
: YURIHIME IS THE ONLY ONE WHO WINS!!!
: Wait... is she about to beat the Talking Monster?!
: NO WAY!
: IT LOOKS STUNNED! SHE DID IT!!!
: WE CAN WIN THIS!!!
: UOOOOOOH!!!!
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Yurihime—also known as Oikawa—unleashed her ultimate skill, a dazzling flurry of attacks that left the Talking Monster "Prototype No. 100 Modified" wide-eyed and frozen in place.
But even as she wrecked house, she still kept up her signature "bewitching big-sis moves," causing the live chat to explode.
"O...Oi...kawa..."
Meanwhile, on the rocky shore of the Middle Floors of Ryukyu Dungeon—
Ochi, having been absolutely YEETED into a ten-meter boulder, slowly peeled himself off the rock like a sticker that's lost its adhesive.
"I'm fine, so drink a potion and sit tight for a bit!"
"Ah... yeah. Sorry..."
"That said, I dunno how long I can keep this up alone, so get back in the fight ASAP, okay?"
"...O-Of course!"
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[Chat Processing Reality]
: Huh? What did Yurihime just say?
: "I dunno how long I can keep this up"???
: HUH?! BUT THAT MOVE WAS BUSTED!!!
: DID IT... NOT ACTUALLY DO DAMAGE???
: WAIT. SHE'S NOT EVEN BREAKING A SWEAT, BUT SHE STILL FELT NOTHING?!
: NO. THIS WAS SUPPOSED TO BE HER DOMINANCE ARC.
: STOP PLAYING WITH MY HEART, GAME DEV.
: Okay, but real talk—if that didn't do much, are we totally screwed?
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Somewhere Else—
"Hah... hah... hah..."
"A-Are you okay? Tomochi, wanna switch?"
"I-I'm... fine... hah... hah..."
Tomochi was running full speed, carrying her armless sister, Rinne. Behind her, Rinna was doing her best to keep up.
She wanted to go faster. But wow. Turns out, carrying a whole human being was hard.
"A-Anyway... hah... hah... Rinna, keep an eye out for monsters!"
"O-Okay!"
They were nearly at the entrance to the 20th floor. So far, they'd been incredibly lucky—
And then.
'''''Grrrrr...'''''
""!? Big Mongooses?!""
A WHOLE PACK OF THEM.
Tomochi cursed. Normally, a single mongoose was whatever. But ten? Yeah. That was a problem.
"Are you KIDDING ME?!"
"Hah... hah... We're way too drained for this...!"
Tomochi carefully set Rinne down.
"...Listen, Rinna."
"W-What?"
"My skill, 'Earth Blessing'—hah... hah... its move 'Stone Barrage'—hah... hah... is AOE. I'll stall them here. You—hah... hah... grab Rinne and RUN."
"N-No way! You're already about to pass out!"
"I'M. FINE."
"YOU'RE SWEATING THROUGH YOUR ARMOR."
"I CAN STILL FIGHT, JUST TRUST ME—hah... hah... The 19th floor is next. It's easier. Just—hah... hah... get Rinne to safety!"
"...But..."
"PLEASE!"
"...Got it."
"Thank you..."
Tomochi took position.
"When I launch my skill, GO!"
"Understood!"
Tomochi raised her staff.
"Here we go—'STONE BARRAGE'!!!"
The ground erupted, launching a barrage of rocks at the mongooses. Dust filled the air.
"UOOOOOOOOH!"
Rinna dashed through—
—only for a mongoose that didn't get hit to YOLO-launch itself at her.
"Huh?—" BAM.
She went flying.
"RINNAAAAAAAA!!!"
She crashed at the foot of the stairs, totally out cold.
Tomochi stared in horror.
Four mongooses were down. Six remained.
And then—
"Shigyyaaaaa!!!!"
Another ten mongooses showed up.
"...Are you actually serious."
Tomochi's knees gave out.
This was it.
They were doomed.
And then—
CRACK! SNAP! SMASHHHH...!!!!
The ground quaked.
Mongooses went flying.
A shadow loomed over the battlefield.
A 190 cm, dark-skinned, muscular, afro-haired, mustached old man emerged from the entrance to the 20th floor—
—and INSTANTLY punched 16 mongooses into another dimension.
"...Huh?"
Tomochi's brain stalled.
And then—
"Are you alright, Ojou-san?"
That voice.
That face.
That sheer aura.
"Huh? Huh? O—Omega-sama?!"
"Yes. It's Omega."
The man—the legend—Omega.
A Wanted man, known for obliterating the Talking Monster.
And also, an absolute Chūnibyō mess.
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